Day 5

27th April 2009 Monday

Today was consultation day. Alan consulted us group by group. We were suppose to show our learning contract to him. I volunteered to show my learning contract to him and my group mates. There were 2 or 3 questions that I did not answered it correctly such as the secondary aim and the age range for my target audience. Alan also suggested that my story needs to have a base meaning there should be a reason why Makri (the man) thought Atun (his neighbor) was a monkey and shot her. He said that maybe it was because Makri's fruit has always been eaten by monkeys that's why he wants to teach those monkeys a lesson. Which also means that there should be more dialogue in my animation.Besides that, Alan thought that Atun should somehow look like a thief or a monkey. And I find that it was a great idea. Therefore I had to change some of my answers for the questionares. Here are the questions which I changed: 1. Who are you telling the story for (primary audience)? Mostly teens and young adults between the age of 18-22. The show will be in Malay language therefore first target will be for the Malays. However, people from other regions or cities will be able to enjoy the show as well as there will be subtitles. The people who watch are mostly who appreciate stories which has silly and funny endings. 4. List the important events of the story. Makri owns a big sapodilla tree in his garden and is proud of it. However, he never got the chance to eat the fruits as it is always stolen by the wild monkeys in the village. He realised that he’s the only villagers with this problem. As a result, Makri couldn’t take it anymore and decided to do something about it. One night, Makri came home and heard rustling outside his house. He saw a moving silhouette which looked like a monkey in his house and started to feel angry and excited at the same time as this will be his chance to finally teach those monkeys a lesson. Makri quietly took his gun, aim at the tree outside and fired his gun. He heard a scream and a loud thud, ran out to see what he has shot. Guess what? It was his neighbor, Atun. Turns out that she was the one who has been stealing his fruits. 6. What traits of the characters in your story are important and how do you intend to establish these traits? Makri (The man) is in his late 30s. He work as a farmer in the field. He is gullible, careless and loves his sapodilla tree very much. These traits will be established by his appearance. Atun (The unlucky woman) is in her early 20s. She looks abit like a monkey and by her appearance, people can tell that she is a proffessional tree climber. Atun lives just next to Makri and also loves to steal his sapodilla fruits. Her traits will be established by her appearance. 10. Does your story need dialog? (write out the dialog) Yes. (Beginning, chasing away the monkeys.) Makri:Shhoooo!! Pegi! Pegi!!Haishhh!!! (Shoo!! Get lost! Get lost! Haishhh!!) (Talking to his neigbor) Makri: Do you have monkey problems?---> (I'm still not sure about this part) Neighbor: (Looked at him as though he’s weird) (Before Makri fired his gun) Makri: Mati je monyet burok! (Die you ugly monkey!) (When Atun get shot) Atun: Oh mamaaaaaaaa!!! ( Mommmyyyyyy!!!) Makri: (Knowing that he succeeded shooting his monkey) Horeeee!! (Yay!!) (When Makri saw that he shot Atun) Makri: Ya Auloh! Aku pikir kau monhey!Maaf Maaf! (Oh my god! I thought you were a monkey! I’m sorry! Sorry!) Well that's all for now. Tri said she'll help me with the translation. Hoho